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英语作文总是写不好，
明明论点、论据、论证全齐了，
为什么议论文还是拿不到高分？！
因为你缺了3S技巧！
中招君手把手带你吃透三大技巧，
让你的“议论文”更上一层楼～
这次有指导有解析，
大家如果有新的思路，
也欢迎在评论区分享！
让我们以下题为例，
How to get on wellwith others
来实战演练一下吧！
知识梳理
Select：
通过甄选写作内容使行文紧凑
问题1：论据立意浅，缺乏思想
Original draft : First, we should learn to share. When we have delicious food, we can share it with our friends.
Selected draft : First, we should learn to share. We can share delicious food with our classmates. Also, we can share our ideas and feelings with each other.
点评：修改稿提升了“分享”的层次，立意更加深刻。
问题2：论据过于笼统，切入角度过大，缺乏说服力
Original draft : Second, we should respect others. If we respect others, others will respect us too.
Selected draft : Second, we should respect others’opinions. If we don’t agree with them, we can point them out politely.
点评：修改稿从“尊重他人的想法”这一点切入，给读者提出了一条具体的建议，容易引起读者共鸣，具有说服力。
Smooth：
通过连接、过渡使行文流畅
技巧1：巧用副词，营造层次感
Original draft : Sharing is very important. We can share our food and happinesswith other people.
Smoothed draft : Don’t simply shareyour food. You should also share yourideas, your happiness and even your sadness.
技巧2：过渡段承上启下、自然流畅地推进
Original draft : First, we should learnto share. Second, we should respect others.
Smoothed draft : First, always be willing to share. Sharing your ideas is important, but never forget to respect others’opinions.
Spice：
摆脱中式思维，使行文地道
(1) Original draft : How to get on wellwith others has a lot of ways.
作者想要表达：有许多方法可以帮助，我们与人友好相处。
Spiced draft : I can give you some tipson how to get on well with others.
(2) Original draft : First, we must bepolite and it will make others have a goodmemory about us.
作者想要表达：有礼貌能给别人留下一个好的印象。
Spiced draft: Be polite, and we canleave a good impression on others.
(3) Original draft : I'm easier to communicate with.
作者想要表达：很容易和我沟通。
Smoothed draft :He may find it easierto communicate with you.
(4) Original draft : If you give him ahand when he is in trouble, he will probably help you in another time.
作者想要表达：你帮助别人，别人也会来帮助你。
Smoothed draft : If you give him ahand when he is in trouble, he will probably help you in return.
Get完知识点，
来练练手试一试吧！
假设你是 Bob，你在回复 Helen 的消息。请你回答她的问题，并针对她的问题谈谈你的看法，给她提几点建议。
My problem is my parents. All of myclassmates have mobile phones. Theyphone each other easily, surf the Internetand play games. I’m always asking my parents for it. But they refuse again and again.None of my friends have got such terribleparents. For it, I can’t study hard. Do youthink I’m right? What shall I do?
Helen, USA
Hi Helen:
I don't think you're right. Students should pay attention to their study. Mobile phones are not necessary for us. They're not like books and pens. You should understand your parents and do what they ask.
Now public phones can be found everywhere. If you have to make a phone call, you can use them. You'd better have a talk with them and tell them you don't ask them for it any longer. Work hard on your lessons and read more interesting books. You can also tell your problem to your teachers and friends. I'm sure they'll help you.
If you have more questions, please ask me.
Yours, Jing
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