文/刘宝彩/天津一、看24分作文，二、看19分作文，三、有病不怕得治，看怎么把19分改进提升到24分，下面我们就来聊聊关于基础差怎样英语作文提分?接下来我们就一起去了解一下吧!
基础差怎样英语作文提分
文/刘宝彩/天津
一、看24分作文，二、看19分作文，三、有病不怕得治，看怎么把19分改进提升到24分。
一、看24分作文如下：
就An unforgettable experience of planting trees题目，写作英语作文如下：
By “experience of planting trees”, I mean that all students together with me could acquire the knowledge and skill from/through planting trees today, on the tree-planting day, March 12 every year.
At the time I joined my school in planting trees to learn a lot about their the advanced technologies used by tree-planting workers whom our teacher invited to do so.
Some of them finish digging 0.5-meter-deep holes mechanically in the ground in a park where young trees have been put one by one, closely followed into being watered by students and me, according to workers. This leads to my feeling a strong sense of responsibility towards an excellent environment.
This environment laid a sound foundation for people including students to live a happy life and keep them in good health, for which their dream may come true.
I should be really proud of being successful in creating the natural environment, so should others, who are happening to know that the friendly environment is considered as being extremely important for people to live a comfortable life.
To live such a life, people are enabled to perform general duty under which to safeguard environment, in my belief.
Everyone will be excited about the stably healthy environment in daily life which, feeling naturally friendly, turns people beneficial to living a positively active life.
It is safe with people who are made happy in mentality or mind, encouraging people including students to develop physically and intellectually, thoughtfully.
This ensures that the properly warm environment is to prove favourable to students who feel in much better health, needing to be brought in delight. That helps make it comfortable to them to enjoy so much better life in school.
Thinking about this, I will be enabled to believe in so much worthy environment created by planting trees. The above tree-planting activity shows beauty to school where to make the environment friendly to students getting in happiness and having a really high quality of the teaching-and-learning life.
Assisting people in improving a good health by planting trees, everyone knows nothing could not be done excellently environmentally. This will last forever to have the life to the full enjoyed by most people.
Learning how importantly the good environment is to provide all around, I will regard it as being necessary to hold this school or roads on streets clean without leaving garbage/rubbish here and there, which does not seem at risk in environment.
The more trees plantation turns highly favourable for keeping people well in study, at work and in life, which sets brightly-green environment beautiful to have an its actively positive impact on all people.
二、看19分作文如下：
“An unforgettable experience of planting”
It is universally acknowledged that protecting environment is everyone's duty, especially for teenagers. Therefore, my classmates and I took part in an annually planting trees activity held by our school.
The activity was consisted of two parts. First of all, students who joined in this activity gathered in the school auditorium to learn what kind of trees would be planted and how to plant.
Then we went to a park by school bus and conducted our planting plan under the guidance of our teachers. Through that students could learn the importance of trees and boost our strength.
Although this activity brought much tiredness to me, I still think it is bound to be a precious memory for me.”
三、有病不怕得治，看怎么把19分英语作文改进提升到24分评析如下三方面：
㈠对19分英文作文，存在问题六点分析如下：
1这篇英语作文的有效句子是protecting environment is everyone's duty, especially for teenagers（保护环境是每个人的责任，特别是青少年）和…students could learn the importance of trees（…了解到树木的重要性），其中缺少原因和结果的陈述;
2没有写出为什么“难忘”unforgetable experience of planting之难忘;
3出现无实质思想的模板句如：It is universally acknowledged that…（众所周知…）；解释性如：…went to a park by school bus and conducted our planting plan（…乘校车去了公园儿、进行了我们的种植计划）；无效句叙述的较多如：First of all,Then（首先…其次…）以及口号式的句子，如：to be a precious memory for me（是一个宝贵的记忆），其中没有提及“宝贵”之处;
4存在中式思维句如：learn the importance…了解到重要性；boost our strength增强我们的力量，其正确的应分别是：see the importance；build up strength
5单词拼错如：unforgetable和tireness了，其正确的分别是unforgettable和tiredness；及物动词使用出错，根据原英语作文谈及的是“种树”，标题应是“An unforgettable experience of planting trees”不应是“An unforgettable experience of planting”；…be consisted of不妥，也就是说，不及物动词不能使用被动语态，而应使用主动语态，即，…consists或consisted…。
6这篇原英文作文整体上看，少了思想“灵魂”，所以要深挖“植树的独特思想性及其保护环境是每个人的责任”之观点产生的原因及其结果，以及产生这观点的思想理论需要采取什么措施就足可以变成实际现实等。
㈡19分英语作文，没有深挖或补充“植树的独特思想性及其保护环境是每个人的责任”之思想
就An unforgettable experience of planting trees题目，补充思想是：所有学生和我今天能通过每年三月十二日学习到种树知识和技巧。这样加入学校种树活动，向种树工作人员学习到了许多有关先进技术。
例如：工作人员用机械完成在公园深挖半米的坑，然后把树苗一颗颗地放入紧随其后由学生包括我按照工作人员要求浇水。这让学生觉得对优美的环境有一种强烈的责任感。
这种环境为包括学生们在内的人们对快乐生活和身体健康可以梦想成真，提供了良好的基础，对此学生们为成功创造自然的环境感到无比自豪，其他人们也应该感到自豪因为恰恰知道适合的环境被认为对人们舒适地生活是极其重要的。
我相信，让过着这种生活的人们有义务履行保护环境。
每一个人在日常生活中对稳定健康的环境，都将会开心的，这源于因自然和睦使得人们受益于过着积极正能量的生活。这样人们精神愉悦而觉得安全，所以鼓励含学生在内的他们从理念上重视发展了身体和智力。
由此适宜温馨环境有利于学生们处于健康得到快乐，这样有助于其在学校充分享受更加美好的生活。所以学生们相信种树带来的环境颇有价值。就是上述种树活动展示了学校之美丽让和睦环境带给学生喜悦及在教和学中享有高质量的生活。
如此思想性有了就完全符合“一次难忘的种植经历”得24分是无疑的，甚至满分25分了。
㈢19分跟24分作文思想对比
1. 19分英语作文思想语言少，过程叙述语言多
“一次难忘的种植经历，众所周知，保护环境是每个人的责任，特别是青少年。因此，我和我的同班同学参加了我们学校一年一度的植树活动。
这项活动由两部分组成，参加这次活动的同学们聚集在学校礼堂，学习应该种植什么样的树，如何种植。然后我们乘校车去了公园儿，在老师的指导下进行了我们的种植计划，通过这个活动，学生们可以了解到树木的重要性，增强我们的力量。虽然这次活动给我带来了很多的疲劳，但我认为这对我来说。一定是一个宝贵的记忆。”所以与思想无关的一些过程的话应该删除，代替之是如下24分作文思想便正确了。
2. 判24分的英语作文思想
通过种树，学生们学会了种树知识和技巧，例如，浇水量、挖坑深度”等及种树的意义，如“前人栽树后人乘凉，以营造良好的自然环境（natural environment）”，以及感悟如：“种树可以为人们有利于学习、生活和工作，提供更加优雅的绿色（brightly-green）环境”。对优美环境有一种强烈责任感，通过种树，学生为成功创造自然的环境感到无比自豪，让过着舒适生活的人们有义务履行保护环境——稳定健康的环境。
好的环境鼓励人们从理念上重视发展了身体和智力，充分享受更加美好的生活。看出种树带来的环境颇有价值，展示了学校之美丽让和睦环境带给学生喜悦及享有高质量的生活。就良好的环境而言知道没有什么不可以做到的。因此提供俱佳环境是多么重要而不是到处丢垃圾，让环境不处于风险之中。
基于丰富的思想写英语作文，得24分的英语作文就水到渠成了。
总结：
上述英语作文——实际上就是要通过植树，深挖其中的思想性，包括思想产生的原因及其思想结果。还有产生这些思想需要采取什么措施就足可以了，而不要说一些个过程的话。
至于写一些高档词汇，我的看法是：只要有思想内容，高档的词汇自然就会产生；如无思想，那高档的词汇是出不来的，所以皮之不存，毛之焉附（皮为思想；毛为高档词汇）。
由此看出：得到24分！大考英语作文怎么从19分爬升得这么高 定对考生有启示！
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