Unit 76 Failure and Success

failure与success的作文 高考命题作文76Failure(1)

请以“Failure and Success”为题,写一篇100字左右的短文。

“范文”

Failure and Success

Failure is the mother of success①. When I have failed in my lessons, I tell myself to take it easy②. I know that I will win next time.

However, many people do not want to admit③ having failed. So they always make the same mistake again and again④. If they could only admit to themselves that it is OK to make mistakes,then they could improve themselves and reach success.

As the old saying goes, “Failure teaches success.” Success that comes after failure⑤ is sweet. We can realize this from experience⑥.

“注释:”

①Failure is the mother of success.: 失败是成功之母。

②take it easy: 不要紧,别着急

③admit: 承认

④again and again: 一再地,一次又一次地

⑤…that comes after failure: 做定语修饰先行词“success”

⑥experience:经验,经历

“点评:”

这是一篇根据命题展开的议论性说明文。

命题作文这种形式写作自由度大,有助于发挥独创性,体现真正的写作水平。但是自由创作空间大,有时会使没有经验的写作者不知所措,无从下笔;而对粗心、不求甚解的写作者来说,有时会一下笔,便在不知不觉中游离主题。因此,这种题型应在平时备考时加强训练。

本文共分3段,在第一段首句作者引用了一句谚语“Failure is the mother of success”切入正题,增强了文章的说服力和表现力。然后,作者运用举例法,以自己的切身体会紧扣主题句展开说明

第二段,作者用“however”话锋一转,从其对立面展开了说明。许多人不承认失败,因此总是一再地犯同样的错误。

最后一段作者在文章结尾处将主题重申了一遍,首尾呼应,而后又回到主题上。这使得全文浑然一体,也使得文章的主题思想在文章的前后照应中得到深化。

资料来源:英语作文高分必背丛书:高考/李华田主编,武汉大学出版社,2005

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