雅思写作几分算高分（如何把雅思从5分拔到7分）

爱吃辣的加拿大大叔雅思托福10多年一线教学中文说得还不错，头像是他家猫在这里分享他原创的雅思写作干货每篇范文都有配音，在同名公众号“英语考试Cat”

你好呀，我是来自加拿大的雅思外教Mac。今天，我想分享一个把雅思从5分拔到7分的思路。

这个思路，其实就是两个词。它们是：

Coherence: 连贯
Cohesion: 衔接

对于雅思写作中的 Cohesion and Coherence，我们先看看雅思考试官网中对应的评分标准（5分）：

Presents information with some organization but there may be a lack of overall progression. 有一定组织性地呈现信息，但总体来说有时缺乏清晰的总体行文推进
Makes inadequate, inaccurate or over use of cohesive devices. 衔接手段不足、不准确或过度使用
May be repetitive because of lack of referencing and substitution 由于指代和替换不足显得行文重复
May not write in paragraphs, or paragraphing may be inadequate. 没有使用段落写作，或者分段不足

在这个评分标准中我们得注意几个关键词，这些关键词其实也告诉了我们怎么做到连贯与衔接：

organization 组织
progression 推进
cohesive devices 衔接手段
referencing 指代
substitution 替换
paragraphing 分段

Organization 组织

Organization refers to using a logical method to 'sort' your information, and that the organization of sentences go in a type of logical order (逻辑顺序). This is linked directly to ‘progression’. If you hear somebody count 1-2-3-, you would automatically assume the next number is a 4. This is progression. This means the reader can almost automatically follow your logical steps in thinking.

Cohesive devices 衔接手段

Cohesive devices means conjunctions (连词), signposting words (路标词), transition words and phrases (过渡词), and other words/phrases that allow for logical connections to be made, allow for transition of idea from one to the next, and signal a change in a direction.

Referencing 指代

Referencing is the term used to represent the use of ‘relative pronouns （关系代词）’. These nouns, such as this/that/there/which/it etc. are extremely useful as they help prevent the writer (or speaker) from repeating the subject (or object). Substitution (by a synonym or even by actually repeating the main term) can be used as well.

Paragraphing 分段

Paragraphing….a standard IELTS essay will have 4 clearly shown paragraphs. *If you are showing ‘progression’, using ‘cohesive devices’ effectively, ‘referencing’ properly, and ‘paragraphing’ correctly, you will get a 7 for Cohenrence & Cohension.

哪些词能帮我们建立cohesion (衔接)呢？

the
this/that/they/it
with
in line with this
in accordance with this
accordingly
along with (this)

除了上边这几个常用的词或短语，这些连词也能帮我们的文章搭建cohesion：

As a reult
subsequently
although
despite this
if/as/which

思路先讲到这里，我来举个例子：

题目： The advantages of the spread of English as a global language will continue to outweigh its disadvantages. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

这是一个学生写的，在Coherence and Cohension方面，只能拿5分。

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我来修理一下，大家注意看蓝字。

There is no doubt that English plays a vital role ininternational cooperation, whereby different nationalities can work together using the medium of English. In line with this, English has been tacitly set as the standard language for international conferences. By using the same ‘international’ language therefore, people can communicate with each other much more easily, and accordingly, allows for international cooperation to develop with less difficulty. This increase ininternational communication is reflected in the way people are informed about the news and in learning knowledge, as the English language also plays an increasingly important role in their transmission to ‘global’ citizens, and not just in greater communication between individuals.

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修改后的版本至少能打7分。

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